Audience Feedback On Mock Up Magazine

I asked a few peers to leave some feedback on my mock-ups so I knew what I needed to do to improve them. Above is what they put down.

Indie Pop Contents Page Mock

By creating a mock up contents it gave me an idea of the overall layout and what it is that I need to include; however it looks very simple and too linear so this is an area which will require a lot of improvement to getting to the final product.